English lesson plan · 10th grade (Year 11 in England) · 60 minutes
Adding, deleting and revising for purpose
Writing & Editing
CCSS W.9-10.5CCSS W.11-12.5England: ACT English (Topic Development)England: SAT Reading and Writing
Objective and success criteria
Students will: Adding, deleting and revising for purpose.
- I can answer questions on today's skill on my own, without help.
- I can explain each step and say why it works.
- I can check my answer and spot a mistake.
Before and after
Needs first: Organisation: sentence placement and logical order
Leads to: Rhetorical synthesis (SAT)
Materials: A model text, Planning frame, Checklists for editing, Mini whiteboards, A short model text on the board, Printed student sheet (below).
Warm-up · 6 min
- Quick retrieval from earlier learning (Organisation: sentence placement and logical order). Students answer on mini whiteboards.
- Show answers together and note who needs support in the main task.
- [1] The first public library in the town opened in 1887. [2] Today, it lends e-books as well as print. [3] At first, it held just 300 books, all donated. [4] Over the next century, its collection grew to more than 50,000 volumes. To make the paragraph most logical, sentence 2 should be placed… (after sentence 3. / after sentence 4. / before sentence 1. / where it is now.) → after sentence 4.Prompt: Look for time words, 'for example', 'this' or 'these' that refer back to something.
- A writer wants to add this sentence: "This ability makes them excellent rescue animals." [1] Dogs have an extraordinary sense of smell. [2] They can detect a single drop of scent in a swimming pool of water. [3] Many breeds also have great stamina. Where should the new sentence go? (after sentence 2 / after sentence 3 / before sentence 1 / It should not be added.) → after sentence 2Prompt: Look for time words, 'for example', 'this' or 'these' that refer back to something.
- [1] Tardigrades are tiny animals less than a millimetre long. [2] For example, they have survived the vacuum of space. [3] They are famous for surviving extreme conditions. [4] They can also withstand temperatures close to absolute zero. To make the paragraph most logical, sentence 3 should be placed… (before sentence 1. / where it is now. / after sentence 4. / before sentence 2.) → before sentence 2.Prompt: Look for time words, 'for example', 'this' or 'these' that refer back to something.
Hook · 6 min
- Show two openings to the same piece of writing and ask which makes them want to read on.
- Share the objective: Adding, deleting and revising for purpose. Read the success criteria together.
I do: model it · 12 min
- Work through the example out loud, saying why you do each step, not just what you do.
- Example: An essay about the invention of the telephone includes the sentence: "Many people today prefer texting to calling." Should this sentence be deleted?
- Step 1: Add or keep a sentence only if it supports the paragraph's purpose.
- Step 2: So the answer is: Yes, because it shifts away from the invention of the telephone.
- Answer: Yes, because it shifts away from the invention of the telephone.
- Pause after each step and ask a student to say what comes next.
We do: guided practice · 12 min
- Do these together. Students try each step on whiteboards before you reveal it.
- Use the hints as prompts rather than giving the answer.
- A paragraph argues that school gardens improve pupils' diets. The writer considers adding: "In one survey, pupils who grew vegetables ate 40% more vegetables at lunch." Should the writer add this sentence? (Yes, because it provides evidence for the paragraph's claim. / No, because it changes the topic to surveys. / No, because surveys are never reliable. / Yes, because it introduces a counterargument.) → Yes, because it provides evidence for the paragraph's claim.Prompt: What is the paragraph's main focus or the writer's stated goal?
- A report on volcano safety says: "People living near volcanoes should know their evacuation routes." The writer wants to support this with a specific example. Which sentence best achieves this goal? (Lava is extremely hot. / In 1991, early evacuation saved thousands of lives near Mount Pinatubo. / Some volcanoes are dormant. / Volcanoes can be found on every continent.) → In 1991, early evacuation saved thousands of lives near Mount Pinatubo.Prompt: What is the paragraph's main focus or the writer's stated goal?
You do: independent practice · 17 min
- Students work on the student sheet. Circulate and check the first two answers of every student early.
- Students who finish: write a question of their own for a partner, with the answer.
The 5 questions are on the student sheet below, with answers in the key.
Exit ticket · 7 min
- Two questions on their own. Sort answers into got it / nearly / not yet to plan the next lesson.
- A paragraph explains how coral reefs protect coastlines from storms. The writer considers adding: "Coral comes in many beautiful colours." Should the writer add this sentence? (No, because it does not relate to how reefs protect coastlines. / Yes, because it adds descriptive detail about coral. / No, because it repeats information already given. / Yes, because it explains how storms form.) → No, because it does not relate to how reefs protect coastlines.Prompt: What is the paragraph's main focus or the writer's stated goal?
- A report on volcano safety says: "People living near volcanoes should know their evacuation routes." The writer wants to support this with a specific example. Which sentence best achieves this goal? (Volcanoes can be found on every continent. / In 1991, early evacuation saved thousands of lives near Mount Pinatubo. / Lava is extremely hot. / Some volcanoes are dormant.) → In 1991, early evacuation saved thousands of lives near Mount Pinatubo.Prompt: What is the paragraph's main focus or the writer's stated goal?
Watch out for
- Writing everything at once without planning.
- Editing only spelling and not whether the writing makes sense.
Support and stretch
Support
- Review first: Organisation: sentence placement and logical order.
- Use concrete materials: a model text.
- Give the first step of each question, or a partly worked example to finish.
- Pair with a confident partner for the guided practice.
Stretch
- Move on to: Rhetorical synthesis (SAT).
- Explain a common mistake in writing and how to fix it.
- Write a word problem that uses today's skill, then solve a partner's.
Homework and more practice
Free online practice with hints and printable worksheets for this skill: eurekami.com/english/grade-10.
Free lesson plan from eurekami.com/lesson-plan-builder