English lesson plan · 8th grade (Year 9 in England) · 45 minutes
Descriptive and narrative techniques
Writing & Editing
CCSS W.8.3.DCCSS W.8.3.BEngland: GCSE English Language Paper 1 Q5England: 11+ English (creative writing)
Objective and success criteria
Students will: Descriptive and narrative techniques.
- I can answer questions on today's skill on my own, without help.
- I can explain each step and say why it works.
- I can check my answer and spot a mistake.
Before and after
Needs first: Figurative language: personification, hyperbole, alliteration, onomatopoeia; Expanding sentences with detail
Leads to: the next skill in this area.
Materials: A model text, Planning frame, Checklists for editing, Mini whiteboards, A short model text on the board, Printed student sheet (below).
Warm-up · 5 min
- Quick retrieval from earlier learning (Figurative language: personification, hyperbole, alliteration, onomatopoeia; Expanding sentences with detail). Students answer on mini whiteboards.
- Show answers together and note who needs support in the main task.
- Which technique is used here? Sally's six silly snakes slithered south. (alliteration / hyperbole / simile / onomatopoeia) → alliterationPrompt: Is it an exaggeration, repeated starting sounds, a sound word, or a thing acting like a person?
- The car stopped. Which sentence adds the most useful detail? (The car stopped stopped. / The old blue car stopped suddenly at the red light. / The car it stop. / Car the stopped.) → The old blue car stopped suddenly at the red light.Prompt: Good detail tells us more: what kind, where, when or why.
- Which technique is used here? This bag weighs more than an elephant! (hyperbole / alliteration / personification / simile) → hyperbolePrompt: Is it an exaggeration, repeated starting sounds, a sound word, or a thing acting like a person?
Hook · 5 min
- Show two openings to the same piece of writing and ask which makes them want to read on.
- Share the objective: Descriptive and narrative techniques. Read the success criteria together.
I do: model it · 10 min
- Work through the example out loud, saying why you do each step, not just what you do.
- Example: Plain: Mum was angry. Which revision best SHOWS rather than tells?
- Step 1: Show, don't tell: let precise details and imagery create the effect.
- Step 2: So the answer is: Mum's lips pressed into a thin line, and she set her mug down a little too hard.
- Answer: Mum's lips pressed into a thin line, and she set her mug down a little too hard.
- Pause after each step and ask a student to say what comes next.
We do: guided practice · 10 min
- Do these together. Students try each step on whiteboards before you reveal it.
- Use the hints as prompts rather than giving the answer.
- Plain: Mum was angry. Which revision best SHOWS rather than tells? (Mum's lips pressed into a thin line, and she set her mug down a little too hard. / Mum was cross and angry. / Mum was very angry indeed. / Mum felt anger.) → Mum's lips pressed into a thin line, and she set her mug down a little too hard.Prompt: Strong description uses precise verbs, sensory details and imagery.
- Plain: The forest was scary. Which revision best SHOWS rather than tells? (The forest was scary and frightening. / I thought the forest was really scary. / Twisted branches clawed at the sky, and somewhere in the dark a twig snapped. / The forest was very, very scary.) → Twisted branches clawed at the sky, and somewhere in the dark a twig snapped.Prompt: Strong description uses precise verbs, sensory details and imagery.
You do: independent practice · 10 min
- Students work on the student sheet. Circulate and check the first two answers of every student early.
- Students who finish: write a question of their own for a partner, with the answer.
The 5 questions are on the student sheet below, with answers in the key.
Exit ticket · 5 min
- Two questions on their own. Sort answers into got it / nearly / not yet to plan the next lesson.
- Plain: The forest was scary. Which revision best SHOWS rather than tells? (The forest was very, very scary. / The forest was scary and frightening. / Twisted branches clawed at the sky, and somewhere in the dark a twig snapped. / I thought the forest was really scary.) → Twisted branches clawed at the sky, and somewhere in the dark a twig snapped.Prompt: Strong description uses precise verbs, sensory details and imagery.
- Plain: Mum was angry. Which revision best SHOWS rather than tells? (Mum felt anger. / Mum's lips pressed into a thin line, and she set her mug down a little too hard. / Mum was cross and angry. / Mum was very angry indeed.) → Mum's lips pressed into a thin line, and she set her mug down a little too hard.Prompt: Strong description uses precise verbs, sensory details and imagery.
Watch out for
- Writing everything at once without planning.
- Editing only spelling and not whether the writing makes sense.
Support and stretch
Support
- Review first: Figurative language: personification, hyperbole, alliteration, onomatopoeia.
- Use concrete materials: a model text.
- Give the first step of each question, or a partly worked example to finish.
- Pair with a confident partner for the guided practice.
Stretch
- Explain a common mistake in writing and how to fix it.
- Write a word problem that uses today's skill, then solve a partner's.
Homework and more practice
Free online practice with hints and printable worksheets for this skill: eurekami.com/english/grade-8.
Free lesson plan from eurekami.com/lesson-plan-builder